Friday, March 18, 2011

Till Death Do Us Part



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In Chapter 29 of FRANKENSTEIN IN LOVE, we reach the exciting conclusion of our story, where science genius nerd Frankie Stein has his final showdown with dead cheerleader Shayla Petrie ... and childhood love Vita Heck.


EXT. THE OLD MILL - ROOF - NIGHT
Frankie and Shayla hear the gunfire.
Look down.

Shayla inches forward
toward the edge of the roof.

SHAYLA
What are those people doing here?

FRANKE
(grabs her hand)
Careful, don’t fall --

SHAYLA
(WHIPS her hand away)
I told you not to TOUCH ME --

ON THE GROUND
Red-Faced aims his rifle at Frankie.

RED-FACED REDNECK
C’mon, PEOPLE.
Let’s take out that FREAK.

The vigilantes all start FIRING.

ON THE ROOF
Shayla PUSHES Frankie over the side.

FRANKIE
HEY --

He FLIES DOWN toward the windmill.
GRABS onto one of the giant, rotating
blades, which slowly starts taking him down.

Bullets FLY through the air.
Start HITTING Shayla.

Her body JERKS like a puppet
without strings in a dance of death.

ON THE GROUND
Beck, Chet and other cops
MOW DOWN the vigilantes
with a SPRAY OF GUNFIRE.

ON THE ROOF
Shayla’s body is riddled
with a hundred bullets.

She holds her stomach with both hands.
Weaves back and forth at the
edge of the roof. Looks down.

SHAYLA
I don’t feel so --

She falls off the side,
PLUMMETS DOWN --

ON THE GROUND
And HITS the soft earth
with a sickening THWUMP.

SHAYLA
Good.

She slowly closes her eyes.
Finally at peace.

DEL DUNN
Looks into the TV camera.
Tears in her eyes.

DEL
Oh, the humanity.
Words can’t describe the horror.
To see young love cut to ribbons
by bullets -- I -- I --
(chokes back a sob)
Even after death,
life can be so fragile.
(blinks her eyes rapidly)
This is Del Dunn,
on the scene at The Old Mill,
where a young girl’s
hopes and dreams have ended --
(beat)
A second time.

The camera light shuts OFF.

LARGE CAMERAMAN
That was GREAT.

DEL
(brightly)
Pulitzer Prize, here I come.

TWO COPS
Bring Frankie over to Chet and Beck.
He’s been handcuffed.
Looks anguished. Distraught.

CHET
Do you realize the
TROUBLE you’ve caused,
young man?

FRANKIE
I know --
(beat)
Am I -- going to jail?

CHET
You bet your ass you are.

BECK
Hold on.
I need to take him back to DC.

CHET
But what about his friend?
The dead body in his car?

BECK
You can have him
after we’re done with him.
(off his look)
Do you realize what he’s accomplished
can do for medical science?

CHET
(to the cops)
Uncuff him.

One of the cops shrugs.
Starts taking off the cuffs.

BECK
You can come with, if you want.
I’d love to have your report
as part of my investigation.

CHET
Really.

BECK
Really.

CHET
But my wife --

BECK
I won’t make you
sleep on the couch.

They keep talking as CAMERA
moves in on Frankie and Vita.

FRANKIE
You look -- different.

VITA
Finally decided to lose the
tomboy/geek/Juno thing.
Wasn’t getting results.
(coy)
You like?

FRANKIE
(shy)
I’d click the Like Button.

Pause.

VITA
Why did you do it, Frankie?
Didn’t you know I’ve been here
for you all along?
(off his look)
What made you choose her over me?

FRANKIE
I don’t know.
(beat)
I was -- stupid.
I was -- chasing what was unavailable.

VITA
Well, that’s really dumb.
You’re not going to find
any happiness doing that.

FRANKIE
Yeah.

He looks at her closely.
Now really seeing her.

VITA
Do you remember our vows?

FRANKIE
Uh -- I think so.
(thinks)
Till death do us part --
(mumbles to himself)
Which now takes on a
whole NEW meaning.

VITA
I’m still the same person, Frankie.
And so are you. Nothing’s changed.

He stares at her with wonder.
Eyes get bright with tears.

FRANKIE
I’m going to have to --
go away for awhile.

VITA
I’ll be here waiting for you.

FRANKIE
Really?

VITA
Dummy. What part of
'unconditional love' didn’t you get?

FRANKIE
(softly)
And could we still --
play Dungeons and Dragons?

VITA
Of course, silly.
(beat)
You’ll always be MY wizard --

And they kiss.

FADE TO BLACK.

2 comments:

  1. Wow.... what an awesome, amazing love story! Oh... I know it is more than that, but I was very moved by that facet of FRANKENSTEIN IN LOVE. Love is too strong an emotion to be contained withing the confines of rational thought.

    Just as the original story was a cautionary tale of mans' meddling in something he can never really understand, much less control, so was yours... with a sexy little twist... the love triangle. Our desire to prolong life, or to bring life back from death, has once again, ended horrifically.

    Although... it didn't turn out too bad for Vita, did it? Hmmm...

    I loved the scene with Del... she is such a cliche... and you did a great job with her character. I love the line "...Even after death, life can be so fragile." On the surface, it might seem to some a contradiction but when you stop and think about what she said... the life that remains after another's death - especially someone close - can be very fragile... it does make sense... what Del said was rather poetic.

    Carole... this story is so amazing... every chapter... every paragraph... I enjoyed so very much! The characters were great, even if you didn't like them... Brub for example... you made a character we love to hate! Haha!

    Sounds like Beck has "plans" for Chet... nice! I love a happy ending!

    After this, I can't wait for ZOMBIE and JULIET... it is going to be even more AMAZING!!! (Saw your comment about the same producer? who is doing ZOMBIE and JULIET being interested in Frankie... nice!!)

    Thank you Carole, for taking me on a wonderful adventure with Frankie and Shayla and Vita and everyone else... great, great story!!!

    XOXOXO <3 <3 <3

    Veronica Marie (Ronnie)

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  2. Thanks so much, doll. Glad you liked it, and 'get' it.

    One thing I'm working on in the rewrite is to flesh out Vita's story more. She needs to be actively going after Frankie starting on page 1. And he has to be refusing her early on and continously. Otherwise, the ending comes out of nowhere. (I added the Vita character after I was 30 pages in -- my subconscious must have realized we needed her to counterbalance all the weird shit going on.)

    BTW, I'm not going to post ZOMBIE & JULIET right now, as I'm rewriting it with the producer, and want to keep the story under wraps for now.

    But I'll post it someday ...

    LUV ya <3!

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