Monday, June 28, 2010

Let The Heist Begin

Happy Monday, crime motherfuckers! It's time once again to take a trip to the dark side, to a place where your most violent hardboiled fantasies become sins of the flesh, right here ... at That Killing Feeling.

In chapter 10 of THE HEISTERS, we flash back again, this time to the start of the heist. Kelsey and the gang break into the stadium finance office, where they will wait all night until the guards arrive in the morning. 'Let the heist begin,' indeed ...


EXT. STADIUM - NORTH GATE - NIGHT
Deserted at this hour.
A large, old black Mercedes sedan idles at the curb.
The exhaust softly puffs out a white cloud in the moonlight.
We see four DARK FIGURES huddled inside.

KELSEY (V.O.)
There’s nothing like the feeling
you get at the start of a job.
At first it’s like butterflies in your stomach,
like you’re going onstage.
But once you get going,
it’s a pure adrenaline rush.
Better than drugs. Booze. Gambling. Even sex --
(beat)
Well, almost.

INT. MERCEDES SEDAN - NIGHT
Ronan’s behind the wheel.
Kelsey rides shotgun in the passenger seat.
Chick and Ludo sit in the back.

KELSEY
(to Ronan)
Ready to rock and roll?

RONAN
Solid, doll. Let’s crack this sucker like a walnut --
(smiles)
And let the heist begin.

CHICK
Where’s Mickey Spillane when you need him?
(to Ludo)
It’s showtime, boychick.

LUDO
(to Kelsey and Ronan)
See you in the funny papers.

Chick and Ludo open their doors. Get out.

EXT. STADIUM GATE - NIGHT
Ludo carries a fold-up chair and a newspaper.
Sets the chair down next to the gate.
Puts the paper on it.

He turns toward Chick.
Interlocks his fingers together.

Holds them down below his knees.
Chick steps onto Ludo’s hands and GRABS the bars.

Ludo then HOISTS Chick up.
He GRABS the top.

Ludo GRABS Chick’s feet and PUSHES him up higher.
Chick squeezes through the opening at the top of the gate
and drops down on the other side with a soft THUD.

Ludo sits down on the chair and starts reading the paper.

IN THE MERCEDES
Ronan turns. Looks at Kelsey.

RONAN
How you doin’?

KELSEY
Top o’ the world, ma.

RONAN
You don’t get -- nervous?

KELSEY
Never. You?

RONAN
I get a bit -- on edge.
Then when the job gets going, I calm down.
Kinda go into auto-pilot.

KELSEY
Same here --
(sees something)
Don’t look now, but we’re coming in for a landing.

LUDO
Gets up from his chair. Stretches and yawns.

KELSEY AND RONAN
Get out of the car. Go the trunk. Open it.
Ronan takes out two large duffle bags.
Kelsey grabs a large suitcase.
They carry them over to Ludo.

LUDO
(takes Kelsey’s bag)
Gate’s open.

KELSEY
Then let’s go make a charitable withdrawal.

EXT. BOX OFFICE ENTRANCE - NIGHT
Chick holds a small, thin flashlight.
A small sliver of light hits Kelsey, Ronan and Ludo’s feet.

CHICK
Hey, hey. The gang’s all here. Follow me.

They walk off into the darkness.

EXT. BOX OFFICE - DOOR - NIGHT
Chick shines a light on the lock as Kelsey works a key.
It softly CLICKS open. She smiles. Quietly pushes the door.

They go in.

INT. STAIRWELL - NIGHT
Kelsey leads Ronan, Ludo and Chick up the stairs.
They walk slowly, carefully, so as not to make any noise.

INT. STAIRWELL - DOOR - NIGHT
Kelsey pulls out another key. Works it in the lock.
It softly CLICKS open. She grabs the doorknob.

KELSEY
(whispers)
Follow me --

And the four of them walk in.

INT. CORRIDOR - NIGHT
The heisters pad softly down the hallway.
Get to a doorway at the end.
A sign reads AUTHORIZED PERSONNEL ONLY.

Kelsey sticks a key in. Turns it.
The door OPENS softly. CLICK.

KELSEY
Open sesame, motherfuckers --

They file in.

INT. FINANCE OFFICE - NIGHT
A large room with cubicles and work stations.
Drab. Functional. Cluttered. Eerie in the dim light.

Kelsey leads them to a door in the far corner.
She opens it. They walk into --

INT. STORAGE ROOM - NIGHT
A windowless room with shelves
along the walls filled with boxes.

Ludo and Ronan put their bags down.
Look around.

CHICK
It’s not much, but I call it ‘hiding place.’

Ludo FLIPS on the lights.

RONAN
Damn, that’s bright. Shut ‘em off.

KELSEY
Leave ‘em on. It’ll keep us awake.

LUDO
So what are we going to do to pass the time?
I’m too keyed up to get any shut-eye.

CHICK
(pulls out a pack of cards)
Anybody up for a game of poker?

KELSEY
Good idea. It’ll keep our wits sharp.

Ronan grabs a box.
Puts it in the middle of the floor.

RONAN
Here’s our table --

They all sit on the floor around the box.
Chick starts shuffling and cutting the cards.

CHICK
How about a little five-card draw?

LUDO
What about Texas Hold-em?

KELSEY
Fuck that yuppie shit.
I say five-card STUD.

CHICK
I’m really starting to like this broad.
(starts dealing the cards)
Stud it is --

RONAN
So what are we gonna play for?

KELSEY
IOU’s work for me.
(smiles, looks at her cards)
After all, tomorrow we’re gonna be rolling in it --

2 comments:

  1. Ahhh... the much anticipated Chapter 10! Okay... gotta get a snack and get comfortable...

    (TINA: "You're not getting in this bed with toast, are you?" ME: "Watch me!" TINA: "Ronnie... you're going to get crumbs all over!" ME: "Naaah.. .the wet spot I make later will soften them up... you won't even feel them" TINA: "You better not spill that milk either, missy!!" ME: "Who said anything about split milk? (big wink).... Okay... let's get busy reading....

    Ooooh... the excitement builds... so, pulling a heist is almost as good as sex? Hmmm... interesting... course, I'd need a partner in crime... someone who know her way around.... LOL!!!

    I love the dialogue... not too wordy... tight... and the way you describe as they make their way inside and to the store room, I almost feel like I'm there... walking up the stairs... carefully stepping on each tread, gripping the handrail for support....

    My heart beats a little faster as they pass through each door, half expecting our intrepid quartet to run into an unanticipated night guard at any moment.... the tension builds...

    Ooooh... I love 5 card stud... especially strip 5 card stud with the girls... I can never remember... does a straight beat a full house... probably why I'm usually the first one naked... lol!!!

    The waiting begins....
    Can't wait for the next chapter! <3

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  2. Full house beats a straight ... and a gay.

    HA HA HA ...

    <3 U2, doll!

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